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Errors 2, 3, & 4: Errors in
joining independent
clauses
 So, the first common sentence error we discussed was the
sentence fragment, which referred to some group of words
that wasnt an independent clause masquerading as an
independent clause.
 The remaining three common errors all deal with improperly
joining together two independent clauses: fused sentences,
comma splices, and run-on sentences.
 Tip: read the rest of WCS reading (pp 24-35), for a refresher
about joining independent clauses.
How DO you join 2
independent clauses???
 There are three correct ways to put two independent clauses
together:
1. Keep them as two separate sentences, separated by a period.
 Ex. The dog ran into the busy traffic. The boy watched with tear-
filled eyes.
2. If you want more connection, join them with a semicolon.
 Ex. The dog ran into the busy traffic; the boy watched with tear-
filled eyes.
3. If you want even more connected meaning, join them with a
comma + coordinating conjunction
 Ex. The dog ran into the busy traffic, and the boy watched with
tear-filled eyes.
Joining independent
clauses, continued
 Think of it as glue: You either leave the two independent
clauses stuck together 1) by proximity (and a period), 2)
by the strong glue that is the semicolon, or 3) by the two-
part epoxy of the comma + coordinating conjunction
(FANBOYS)
 For And Nor But Or Yet So
Fused sentences
 Fused sentences happen when two independent clauses are
joined up with NO GLUE AT ALL.
 Ex. The boy ran toward the intersection the car tires screeched.
See how awkward this is? Thats why this is a fairly rare error.
 Fix it: by adding the correct strong glue (period, semicolon, or
comma + FANBOYS)
1. The boy ran toward the intersection. The car tires screeched.
2. The boy ran toward the intersection; the car tires screeched.
3. The boy ran toward the intersection, and the car tires screeched.
Comma splices &
Run-ons
 There are three strong glues that hold these independent
clauses together, right?
1. Period
2. Semicolon
3. Comma + Coordinating Conjunction
Well, the last two common sentence errors arise from
misuse of that third strong glue, the comma + coordinating
conjunction.
Comma splices
 Comma splices are two independent clauses joined with only a
commaBUT A COMMA ISNT STRONG ENOUGH GLUE
ALL BY ITSELF!
 Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the
intersection, the car tires spooked him.
 Fix it: by a) adding the missing coordinating conjunction:
 Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the intersection,
but the car tires spooked him.
 Or by b) changing the comma to a semicolon or a period:
 Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the
intersection; the car tires spooked him.
 Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the intersection.
The car tires spooked him.
Run-on sentences
 NOTE: Sometimes the term run-on sentence is lumped together with fused
sentence or is simply used to refer to a sentence that is too longthats NOT how
Im using it here.
 For my purposes, a run-on sentence is the mirror image of the comma splice:
 A run-on sentence is two independent clauses joined with only a coordinating
conjuctionBUT A COORDINATING CONJUCTION ISNT STRONG
ENOUGH GLUE ALL BY ITSELF! You need that comma, too.
 Ex. All the cars had come to a stop and a friendly driver got out of her truck.
 Fix it: by a) adding the missing comma:
 Ex. All the cars had come to a stop, and a friendly driver got out of her truck.
 Or by b) changing the comma to a semicolon or a period:
 Ex. All the cars had come to a stop; a friendly driver got out of her truck.
 Ex. All the cars had come to a stop. A friendly driver got out of her truck.
So thats it
 Youve just learned how to correct something like 90% of the
errors I encounter when grading! So now, when you see this:
 The kind motorist holding out her arms. The dog ran to her the
motorist smiled and handed the boy the dogs leash. The boy
hugged his dog, he turned around and walked toward home.
His dog licked the tears from his face and he prayed his
parents would never find out what had happened.
 You can change it to this:
 The kind motorist held out her arms. The dog ran to her. The
motorist smiled and handed the boy the dogs leash. The boy
hugged his dog, and he turned around and walked toward
home. His dog licked the tears from his face; the boy prayed
his parents would never find out what had happened.

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Raina Lyons: Four Common Sentence Errors Lecture part 2.pptx

  • 1. Errors 2, 3, & 4: Errors in joining independent clauses So, the first common sentence error we discussed was the sentence fragment, which referred to some group of words that wasnt an independent clause masquerading as an independent clause. The remaining three common errors all deal with improperly joining together two independent clauses: fused sentences, comma splices, and run-on sentences. Tip: read the rest of WCS reading (pp 24-35), for a refresher about joining independent clauses.
  • 2. How DO you join 2 independent clauses??? There are three correct ways to put two independent clauses together: 1. Keep them as two separate sentences, separated by a period. Ex. The dog ran into the busy traffic. The boy watched with tear- filled eyes. 2. If you want more connection, join them with a semicolon. Ex. The dog ran into the busy traffic; the boy watched with tear- filled eyes. 3. If you want even more connected meaning, join them with a comma + coordinating conjunction Ex. The dog ran into the busy traffic, and the boy watched with tear-filled eyes.
  • 3. Joining independent clauses, continued Think of it as glue: You either leave the two independent clauses stuck together 1) by proximity (and a period), 2) by the strong glue that is the semicolon, or 3) by the two- part epoxy of the comma + coordinating conjunction (FANBOYS) For And Nor But Or Yet So
  • 4. Fused sentences Fused sentences happen when two independent clauses are joined up with NO GLUE AT ALL. Ex. The boy ran toward the intersection the car tires screeched. See how awkward this is? Thats why this is a fairly rare error. Fix it: by adding the correct strong glue (period, semicolon, or comma + FANBOYS) 1. The boy ran toward the intersection. The car tires screeched. 2. The boy ran toward the intersection; the car tires screeched. 3. The boy ran toward the intersection, and the car tires screeched.
  • 5. Comma splices & Run-ons There are three strong glues that hold these independent clauses together, right? 1. Period 2. Semicolon 3. Comma + Coordinating Conjunction Well, the last two common sentence errors arise from misuse of that third strong glue, the comma + coordinating conjunction.
  • 6. Comma splices Comma splices are two independent clauses joined with only a commaBUT A COMMA ISNT STRONG ENOUGH GLUE ALL BY ITSELF! Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the intersection, the car tires spooked him. Fix it: by a) adding the missing coordinating conjunction: Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the intersection, but the car tires spooked him. Or by b) changing the comma to a semicolon or a period: Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the intersection; the car tires spooked him. Ex. The dog ran around in circles in the middle of the intersection. The car tires spooked him.
  • 7. Run-on sentences NOTE: Sometimes the term run-on sentence is lumped together with fused sentence or is simply used to refer to a sentence that is too longthats NOT how Im using it here. For my purposes, a run-on sentence is the mirror image of the comma splice: A run-on sentence is two independent clauses joined with only a coordinating conjuctionBUT A COORDINATING CONJUCTION ISNT STRONG ENOUGH GLUE ALL BY ITSELF! You need that comma, too. Ex. All the cars had come to a stop and a friendly driver got out of her truck. Fix it: by a) adding the missing comma: Ex. All the cars had come to a stop, and a friendly driver got out of her truck. Or by b) changing the comma to a semicolon or a period: Ex. All the cars had come to a stop; a friendly driver got out of her truck. Ex. All the cars had come to a stop. A friendly driver got out of her truck.
  • 8. So thats it Youve just learned how to correct something like 90% of the errors I encounter when grading! So now, when you see this: The kind motorist holding out her arms. The dog ran to her the motorist smiled and handed the boy the dogs leash. The boy hugged his dog, he turned around and walked toward home. His dog licked the tears from his face and he prayed his parents would never find out what had happened. You can change it to this: The kind motorist held out her arms. The dog ran to her. The motorist smiled and handed the boy the dogs leash. The boy hugged his dog, and he turned around and walked toward home. His dog licked the tears from his face; the boy prayed his parents would never find out what had happened.