Emily Ohui Adevor External.doc
This document contains assessor comments on a student's thesis titled "Assessment of Emotional Abuse and Neglect on Child Development." The assessor provides feedback on various areas that need improvement based on the university's dissertation format guidelines. In chapter one, the student is asked to check the abstract format and apply proper APA in-text citations. In chapter two, the introduction needs to be shortened and topics should be bolded. The chapter also needs to be rearranged logically. In chapter three, the caption and some sentences need revision. Chapter five's recommendations section should not be a literature review and the recommendations need re-aligning and numbering. The references section requires careful review and application of APA 6th edition
Emily Ohui Adevor External.doc
- 1. Page 1 of 2 PRESBYTERIAN UNIVERSITY COLLEGE, GHANA FACULTY OF DEVELOPMENT STUDIES SCHOOL OF GRADUATE STUDIES M.A INTERNATIONAL DEVELOPMENT STUDIES FORM FOR ASSESSORS COMMENTS Name of Student: Emily Ohui Adevor Students ID: Topic: ASSESSMENT OF EMOTIONAL ABUSE AND NEGLECT ON CHILD DEVELOPMENT No. AREAS ASSESSORS COMMENTS (Suggested Corrections to be Effected by the Candidate) 1. PRELIMINARIES Tittle page: Please check from guideline on the correct format for this page Abstract:The abstract should not be paragraphed. See guideline 2. CHAPTER ONE Page 1: Provide a short introduction to what the Chapter contains Page1: Check APA 6th Edition for in text referencing style Page 3: Check all misplaced full stops(.) and delete them Page 6: Check APA 6th Edition referencing and apply 3. CHAPTER TWO Page 10; The introductory part is only to give insight briefly into what the Chapter contains (One paragraph) Page 10: Bold Tittle of Topics and sub-topics. (Check PUCGDissertation format) Page 39: Kindly re-arrange the Chapter two in a logic of theoretical Review, Empirical and Conceptual 4. CHAPTER THREE Page 40: Check guidelines for appropriate Caption Page 45: Re-cast the sentence into technical language Page 47: Check PUCGDissertation format
- 2. Page 2 of 2 Name of Assessor: Signature: Date: .................................................. 5. CHAPTER FOUR OK 6. CHAPTER FIVE Page 64: The recommendation section is not another review of literature. See guideline. The recommendation are too many, kindly re-align and number them 7. REFERENCES Carefully go through what the APA 6th Edition referencing and apply the references (67) 8. APPENDIX OK